First and foremost, Seferia found something strange in the last few days of browsing stories in the Buffy: The Vampire Slayer section.  At least for now, she isn’t coming across any extremely horrible stories.  In fact, she’s come across a lot of promising ones that she might dig into more later.  Of course, there were probably ones that are easy shots at having something beyond headache-inducing; however, Seferia did not feel like venturing into the twisted scene of Spike/Xander stories.

So, instead, Seferia decided to wander around and check out other usual haunts of hers.  Guess what?  Devil May Cry is still full of a bunch of fools that write stuff that shouldn’t exist.  Seriously, people should have learned by now that the “pulled into the game” stories do not work and are a sure recipe for failure.  At least, one would think that somewhere along the line, someone would tell a new author not to use that plot device, right?

I guess not.

Amazingly, from what little I could stomach of the story, the author has enough grasp onto what they are doing in order to maintain proper grammar and sentence structure.  So, I cannot use the excuse that they have a malfunctioning brain when it comes to thinking for a reason as to why they would use this plot.  Nope, the largest grammatical quirk that I can find is an apparent love for caps lock, since I suppose that people enjoy screaming above what a simple exclamation mark can indicate.

Also, I must wonder why these authors always find names like “Akina” when coming up with their original characters.  It seems to me that the author is trying to come up with an average teenager on most cases.  Yet, they have a strong tendency to have names that just scream that they are a anime fanatic.  I can’t think that Akina nor Tera are very common names at all.

Well, this story is mostly just a “meh” to me.  It garners no rage, for it’s just standard fare.  I come across these sort of tales all the time.  I just wish that someone would smack sense into authors before they write these.

Write the silly thing in second person. Yes, that will most definitely ensure that I’ll be in a rage and not get too far into the story.

Now, a while ago, I had said that I’d bring up a story from the DMC area since that is abundant in horrible stories. Well, I delayed because the pile was so pungent that I didn’t want to really dig into it much to find one.

Well, today I return with this one, which I had known about at the time that I had spoken of Devil May Cry fanfics. I knew full well that it was a story with possible tolerable writing if not for the fact that the person decided in a moment of great lack of brilliance to write in second person. Quickly scanning through the story proves that this person has a firm grasp on grammar. So, they have that as a plus.

Still, what exactly goes through someone’s head to make them decide “I will write this story in second person”? Seriously, I don’t know how that thought process even started. I can get the huge piles of first person stories that I’ve found post-Twilight. The fact that they appeared post-twilight and tend to have a certain… well, yea, it points to Twilight having been a contributing factor in inspiration there. Even then, there are successful first person stories. So, I do occasionally forgive the uneasy feeling of reading someone’s diary when I read that sort of story. No matter about the legitimacy of writing in first person, how does someone come to think of second person?

Second person is usually stated to be utilized for persuasive speeches. It’s something a person utilizes to get a person across to the “you” which is being referenced. That “you” is usually not just this random person who clicks on a story and decides to read it. That random person is unlikely to be pulled into the story because “you”. More likely, they’ll be turned away as I am because they aren’t making decisions and don’t want to be part of that story.

The only published fictional works that I know of that ever were written in the second person perspective were “make your own adventure” stories. I did read those when I was younger, but they had a very important part to them. That part was rather simple, the reader made decisions by flipping to pages. Thus, the story did indeed interact with the reader.

This one, on the other hand, does not.

Not to mention, I’m more than certain that the author made the “you” character a Mary Sue. That really doesn’t help their story at all.

Sad final statement: there’s worse fics out there in DMC. I may go back to digging to bring another one to light on another date.